Sunday, 29 May 2016

The tallest tree

            The tallest tree                                                                  
 I felt scared when we put on the safety gear. I had to have the right size gear to climb the tree. We started to climb the ladder. I put my foot on the tree. It was then I felt terrified. I put my hands on the tree and I felt better. Then I started to climb the tree. So I reached for the wooden hand grab above me.  My hands shivered, as I clutched on to the pole.  I felt like I would faint. I started to abseil down the tree. I held nervously onto the rope but I was not allowed to. My team shouted you can do it.  I can't do it I thought to myself.  Just a little further.  I finish with a thud and I feel proud. I didn't make it to the top but at least I tried. 

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In this writing I was learning to use connecting words to change from short to complex sentences. I went well because I used some complex sentences and joint on short sentences for example  my hands shivered, as I clutched on to the pole.  I felt like I would faint.
My next step is to use complex sentences more in my writing. 


4 comments:

  1. A delightful piece of writing Nakia. You did well to show your reader how nervous you were feeling, and your sense of pride and relief when it was finished. Great job! Mrs P

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  2. You did well to show your reader how nervous you were feeling. From Jye

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